I was imreassed!
You know, some people have been giving you harsh reviews, but I can't see what their major problems are. You managed to hold MY attention all the way thru (not easy these days) and I enjoyed it. One thing you could work on is your transitions - cutting from scene to scene a little bit faster would help the story along.
And for the next episode - How about spending 40$ on a decent microphone? Text is cool, to a point, but I really think you could benefit from some sound work.